Friday, October 1, 2010

Flash Fiction Friday - Illuminated

RR Tracks by Igor Shitikov

He found her as he did every morning, walking barefoot along the railroad tracks, face to the sun, eyes lost in a golden haze. She claimed the light was best there; he begged her to consider the danger. And every morning, she smiled at him, turning her face momentarily from the light, looking down into his eyes, and he knew she was his for another day. One more day.

Later, after he bundled her back to his loft, holding her close in a vain attempt to stop her shivering, they made love, always the same way, always with his hope to tie her to him but his knowledge that she belonged in the sun. Later still, as the sun went down, she seemed to glow for an instant in the fading light, then in the darkness she cried out in pain every night.

But he went on waking at dawn, staggering out down the street to look for her, to look for the sun. He couldn't stop seeking, and she couldn't stop being found, and the world turned as it always had and always would.


"Why is she there?"  I believe those were my first words when I saw this picture.  Why the hell is she there?  I mean, aside from the obvious reason that the photographer thought it would make an interesting composition.  There were probably sexy answers to that question; maybe she was trying to pick up hobos.  But I couldn't really think of a reason.

She's come to the railroad tracks at dawn, or thereabouts, because the light is good.  I understand that it could just as easily be sunset, since sunset usually connotes more golden hues and dawn more rose-colored ones, but dawn or sunset makes no difference; she's there because the sun is there.  Thus, the genesis of my little tale.

So, she's there for the sun.  But she's in a precarious position.  Someone should tell her to get her ass off the railroad tracks before she becomes the latest in a far-too-long line of train deaths.  But by removing her from the tracks, that person would be taking her away from the sun.  Then I thought of the myths I know, certain of which revolve around the sun, one of which is that the sun flees across the sky because it's being chased by wolves.  Is someone chasing her?  Is she the sun?

But then, let's also consider Persephone, who is pursued in a more gentle way, who is taken from light into darkness and then back into light again.  Our sun-worshiper's pursuer is benign; he doesn't realize that he's doing anything but saving her from being run over by a train.  But she'll come back, every morning, just as every morning he'll "rescue" her.

Just some random thoughts on the subject of myth.  I don't claim that my story is anything but two people who don't completely understand one another but make sacrifices to be together all the same.  He follows her, she allows herself to be found.  And it neatly avoids introducing hobo sex into things.

If, on the other hand, you would like to introduce hobo sex into things, the place to do that is definitely Flash Fiction Friday.  Who knows; there may be some hobo sex already there, so you'd be in good company.  Actually, I'm half-tempted to write another involving hobo sex now.  See what Flash Fiction Friday makes me do?

17 comments:

Drenchxoxo said...

OMG @ hobo sex (ponders that for a moment)

You are a delightful read and I so enjoyed the commentary at the end.

Well done!

Anonymous said...

holy cow....

sorry but I have to run, I'm going to my nearest train yard... I had no idea that rails could be so fun...

The Panserbjørne said...

Nothing quite so grandiose and mythological about mine, I'm afraid, but I did at least make a stab at a commentary track this time around. Hope it meets with your approval.

I know this story definitely meets with MY approval. A child of the sun indeed. I considered that she enjoyed it, but hadn't thought to take the approach that it was quite that essential. There's a wistful tone to this that seems to twine through a lot of your stuff lately. Everything going OK in your life?

Hopefully so. Anyhow, happy FFF!

-- PB

Anonymous said...

Seems a mystery; is she real, a phantom, a fairy, a fantasy?

Dioneo said...

Beautiful as always, Lexi! I particularly enjoyed your use of light: the presence and absence of the sun. Fantastic writing!

SlowBurn said...

I REALLY liked that. The longing in it was beautiful! Brilliant!

Naughty Lexi said...

@Drenchxoxo: I guess you haven't seen that particular underbelly of pornography. My advice: stay clear. Glad you enjoyed my non-hobo take on things.

@Sir Thomas: Hell, "rail" is a fun verb, let alone a noun ;) Mind you don't get run over, dear.

@PB: Yours didn't have to be grandiose to be good. I'm really not trying for grandiose, just interesting. And yes, commentary tracks most definitely meet with my approval.

As far as the wistful nature of my stories recently, let's just say that there are things about which I'm feeling somewhat wistful myself. That's life.

@bumtickler: You tell me ;) I'd say this is magical realism, so she could be all three.

@Dioneo: Thanks hun. Light seemed very important this week, so I guess it just came naturally.

@slowburn: If I've managed to communicate longing, then I've done what I set out to do. I suppose there's no pun intended in "brilliant?" ;)

Anonymous said...

ROFLOL!!! Hobo sex indeed! Lovely story today.

Naughty Lexi said...

@rozewolf: Thanks hun. You should all be thankful I didn't bring in any hobos. They're stinky ;P

Advizor54 said...

Hey! Who you calling stinky, some of my best friends are gay. Oh wait, did you say hobo, 'cause I was confused a bit.

The mythology angle you put in your stories always gives them more depth and interest for me. Your commentary after helps brings a wider range of ideas into the story.

Naughty Lexi said...

@Advizor: I knew stinky hobos. Stinky hobos were friends of mine. And you, sir, are no stinky hobo.

I'm not habitually putting mythology into my stories, it just seems to happen recently. Perhaps my muse is longing for her Aegean homeland. I was well-schooled in the classics as a child, and I love myth.

Advizor54 said...

Does that mean I'm not your friend or that I don't stink....

Your classical training comes through and it's always welcome.

Naughty Lexi said...

@Advizor: No, it means that I'm quoting Lloyd Bentsen with a twist. But I don't think you're either Dan Quayle or stinky.

Anonymous said...

I'm seriously struck with admiration! What a beautiful story.

Naughty Lexi said...

@Spring Flower: The admiration is mutual; I'm always struck by yours as well. You have a singular way with words that I might hope to compete with, but never surpass.

Max said...

Hobo sex, I love it. :-)

That was my first thought too - why on earth is she there dressed like that?!? Sexy pic, to be sure, but not so easy to work into a story. Nice job.

Max

Naughty Lexi said...

@Max: Great minds think alike, I guess ;) I think your story had more sexy possibilities and yet less chance for hobo sex (is that really going to become my thing?).